Treaflet Boughwhiffler

[Treaflet & Coppertooth]

Name: Treaflet Boughwhiffler

Age: 19 seasons

Gender:male

Species: squirrel

Marital Status:uninterested

Position and Home: Position: rogue archer/swordsman Home: a dray near Redwall Abbey, but he rarely uses it because he wanders

Strengths: climbing, running, weapons, spying

Weaknesses: water, tight spaces, crowds (out of fights) spiders

Alignment: good rogue

Appearance: A medium height squirrel with chestnut fur, merging into tan at his underbelly. He is not especially good looking, bit he does not look horrible. he has a scar from where he fell out of a tree at four seasons old.

Personality: He is nice and friendly, but is sometimes quiet as a result of being solitary. He thinks a lot and comes up with some good ideas.

History:Treaflet grew up with his parents and twin in the former King Altrams' (probably not spelled right) groves. There was a severe famine, so his parents fled to Redwall Abbey. His father and brother got separated along the way, and his mother died at the Abbey. Treaflet was kept away from the dibbuns by the elders, but when he fell out of a tree at four seasons old, they decided he could finally play with the other dibbuns. He eventually grew up, and at the age of thirteen he learned that his brother, whose name was Coppertooth, and his father were alive and well at Salamandastron. He went to visit them and got his sword, which was made by his brother. He returned to Redwall and lived happily there, visiting his twin every other season.

Codeword Martin the Warrior

[Skipper]

All right. This isn't bad. I like the character, but you might want to add some more detail.

To start with, you could expand more on the appearance. Try including his build -- is he thin, fat, muscular, or just average? You might also include his eye color and the type of clothing he usually wears.

As for his strengths/weaknesses, elaborate a bit more. When you say "weapons," do you mean he is skilled in fighting with them? What kind? And is he afraid of water, or can he not swim?

And add some more to the personality; how is he on the inside, compared to the outside, and why is he solitary?

And I simply must know why it is he could play with the dibbuns only after falling out of a tree.
Now, I'm not trying to be picky. I just don't have a really good picture of your character yet. All I need is enough detail to have a general idea of what to expect in your future posts. Otherwise, great character.

-Skip

[Treaflet & Coppertooth]

ok, he is thin, has green eyes, and wears a green vest. He is skilled at fighting with most ranged weapons (i.e. bow, throwing knives) and can use a sabre pretty well. He cant swim because of his tail. it gets soaked and heavy and drags him down. He looks average, and seems to be paying attention all the time, but he is actually assesing the situation and deciding how to act. He is solitary because he lives alone, and is unused to many creatures at once. The elders babyed him because he looked small and weak. And after he fell out of the tree and was mostly fine, they realised he was tougher than he looked.
I know you are not trying to be picky, I am on 6+ redwall sites.

[Skipper]

This works, I guess. But next time, try to just add onto the profile rather than putting it all in another post. ;D
Accepted.

[Treaflet & Coppertooth]

oh ok, And thanks!