Non Malum

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Name: Non Malum (Goes by Malum)

Age: 20 years old

Gender: Female

Species: Ferret

Marital Status: Single

Position and Home: Wanderer, Mossflower

Strengths:
Some of Malum's strength's include her smarts. She always has a plan and knows how to get out of almost anything. Malum also is very quick. She is especially fast when she is afraid, or pursuing others. Another one of her strengths is that she is really good at acting. She can make herself cry, or even act bloodthirsty.

Weaknesses:
Ahhh...Her Weasknesses...A.K.A. Her Achilles' Heel One of them, is that she cannot say no or hurt a dibbun..EVER... Another one is her strength. She is VERY weak in upper body strength, so she prefers daggers, against axes.

Alignment: Good

Appearance: She is a very thin ferret. Malum has ivy green eyes and an ivy green cloak. The ivy cloak has vine marking climbing up the side of it.
Malum has a green belt across her body from shoulder to hip. That belt holds a sword with a tint of green on the blade and hilt.


Personality: She is a softie. Malum is very funny and usually jokes around. Yet, she still knows how to be serious at certain times. As in, during an attack, she won't burst oput laughing. Also, she is very kind and forgiving to those who treat her with disdain.

History: Malum was born into a family of re-formed ferrets. They farmed the land and helped other "vermin" turn good. When she turned 10, she moved out and started her life as a wanderer.
She was one out of 2 children. Her sister stayed with the family to help out. Later on, Malum got a note saying that her mother, father, and sister had been killed on mistake by a group of wood landers.
Malum was heart-broken, yet held no grudge against woodlanders. She moved on and traveled the country. She went to Salamandastron, Redwall, and even The far northern lands.

Codeword Martin The Warrior

NOT DONE! GTG 2 Bed

[Skipper]

Okay, um, firstly, I'm gonna say you need at least one more weakness. Secondly, I'd like to see your strength/weaknesses in paragraph format. While a lot of characters have been accepted like that, this one is so young that I'd like more of an explanation as to how she's skilled/weak in those areas. Her weakness is dibbuns? That could mean anything. Now, keep in mind, she is only thirteen. That isn't nearly old enough to be anywhere close to a master of stealth or speed. She could be smart, but her age provides a lack of experience as well, which you could mention in her weaknesses.

As for the appearance: What's the crescent mark thing about? How did it get there, and what kind of mark are you talking about? Is it a discoloration in the fur, or something else. If it is, what are the chances of something like that even occurring? This isn't anime -- we're trying to be a bit more realistic. Now, what about her fur, eyes, height, build? There's no such that as perfectly average -- everyone has something distinguishing about him/her (but pretty much never a crescent-shaped forehead-mark ).

The personality is what makes up the character! It is what affects how Non will act. You really need to expand on that more. For instance, you said that she can be serious as certain times. What kinds of situations, specifically? How serious are we talking? Does she still have a tendency to joke around in said situations, or does she seem to change in personality completely?
Why not start with a minimum of two five-sentence paragraphs? We'll see what needs to be done after that, if anything.

This history, while acceptable, could be a lot better. Everyone kills of his/her characters' parents. Why not try something different? While I, myself, am guilty of this as well, it actually pertains to my characters' present condition. It gives my characters motivation to act the way they do, i.e., without the death of Barr Stromness' wife and daughters, he'd have no reason to be at Redwall, let alone go to the lengths he is about to go in order to ensure his son's safety.
But a character's history needs to relate to his/her personality and appearance. Where did that crescent mark come from? What made Non as funny and soft as you say she is? What's with all the ivy green? Where did her stealth, smarts, and speed come from? She couldn't have been born an excellent cross-country runner. Plus, nobody moves out at the age of ten. Sixteen, maybe, but ten is incredibly early. Ten-year-olds are not nearly mature enough to survive in the world easily, let alone be so forgiving of someone who just killed his/her family. You say her location is Mossflower. Why is she there? How did she arrive there?

Hope I'm not scaring you away with all of this. I just don't want you jumping into something without knowing even what your character is like.